How does my cold call script sound? Idea's Tips appreciated?

I work as an IT consultant doing subwork, I wanted to branch out and start getting clients of my own. I put together a cold call script... how does it sound? Any suggestions to improve it would help!

Good morning: Briefly, My name is Jason Miller with xyz consulting. We assist our clients in your industry to improve their productivity. We do this by offering IT services that ensure you have a smooth running and fully functioning computer network. I was wondering if we might be able to discuss the possibility of helping you and your company as well.

How have you been currently handling any problems related to technology?

IF WORKING WITH A CONSULTANT Q'S

How satisfied are you with your current IT provider?
What is it that they do well?
Is there anything that you feel could be improved?
How receptive would you be to looking at a possible alternative to you current situation?

It certainly sounds as if we might be able to help you. I'm wondering, could we go ahead and schedule an appointment to pursue this further? Which day next week would be best for you?

Great script. Only part I will change will be intro

Good morning: Briefly, My name is Jason Miller with xyz consulting. We assist our clients by improving your IT/Computer network. Our services increase your productivity by ensuring you have a Smooth/fast/more functional [ i suggest pick only two so you can have more impact ] computer network. I was wondering if we might be able to discuss the possibility of helping you and your company as well.

Its just a little shorter and it also describes your service before giving benefits. A savvy business man will admire your confidence when you first state what your particular product is before selling benefits.

Good Luck